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Zaylie posted this thread...
Nov. 22, 2012 at 4:50 pm

So I thought for the heck of it, to start a different thread. My other one is to old so. yeps.
 
Also with this one, Anyone can post a poem in. Also, the name, well, it's because Most of the poems I'll be writing are about a guy that just broke up with me. so yeah.

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Zaylie replied...
Nov. 22, 2012 at 5:01 pm

You Hurt Me
 
You hurt me,
Destroyed me,
Took everything I believed,
Through it away,
Just so you could leave me,
So you could find the right one,
Even though you'd told me I was.
 
You're the bigest lier of them all.

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SuNshiNe007 replied...
Dec. 4, 2012 at 9:15 am

Zaylie this is so sad, but you did a good job on it. I know how you feel. That guy dont deserve you anyway and he doesnt know what he has lost. You will find the right guy just dont give up. I see you found one of my poems I miss you soo much too it is good to be back on here to see all my friends on here.
 
~Sunshine~

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moonissunguy replied...
Dec. 4, 2012 at 1:12 pm

you spelled threw wrong in line 4. Pretty good though

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Zaylie replied...
Dec. 4, 2012 at 8:15 pm

Sun thanks. And thanks noon.
 
You Found Me
 
I was hurt,
And broken,
In no shape to take,
But you picked me,
And lifted me up,
Gave me hope,
When I didn't see need for any,
I love you,
You found me,
When I was just giving up.

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Sparkle1popsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 8, 2012 at 7:01 pm

I like the idea of this poem, but it should rteally be longer. Maybe you could add some more descriptive words or elaborate on your ideas.

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taylorbugThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 8, 2012 at 7:08 pm

I think she needs to add more figurative/poetic language in there. Use metaphors! They're really easy to do in poetry. Good luck!

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diamondcoates replied...
Dec. 10, 2012 at 4:06 pm

This poem is good and so true about so many people. We get hurt by the people that we think are our friends. Keep writing and stay positive.

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Zaylie replied...
Dec. 11, 2012 at 8:50 pm

You Blame Me
 
You're blaming me for this,
You're saying it's over,
Your never there,
It's not as though I can do anything now,
I told you,
And sure maybe I shouldn't have,
But now that heart that was healing,
Is once again bleeding,
And I can no longer control it.

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Zaylie replied...
Dec. 11, 2012 at 9:00 pm

You Say Goodbye
 
You're saying goodbye,
But I won't except it,
I'll fight until I die,
I can't let you go,
When you're the one healing me,
Cuz if I let you go,
I'll bleed,
And I can't deal with that,
Not now,
Not again,
But you won't say you'll stay.

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