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I Hope This Forever Be

Zoe-22-Turner posted this thread...
Nov. 17, 2012 at 8:37 pm

I have waited so long for you
Oh now what do I do
My wishes are granted
My undying love requited
 
As tears of joy run down my cheeks
My dreams now are possibilities
I can hold your hand so tight in mine
And all my thoughts fall out of line
 
Prince Charming on your vallient stead
Whisk me away with the wind and read
Lines old poets wrote about you and me
Oh my love,  i hope this forever be

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SuNshiNe007 replied...
Dec. 4, 2012 at 8:53 am

Wow this is amazing I love it! :D Its good to be able to get back on here again and read such beautiful poetry.

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TheWriterReader replied...
Dec. 6, 2012 at 7:12 pm

That was beautiful :) good job!! I like the words you used, really pretty :D -WRA

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kdaws15 replied...
Dec. 8, 2012 at 1:57 am

nice wording!  I really liked it!

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KnitsandPurls replied...
Dec. 8, 2012 at 1:20 pm

This is so sweet. It's a nice love poem anyone would like to read.
My favorite line is "My dreams now are possibilities".
Though the rhyme is a little shaky in parts, it works well for the majority of the poem.
The old-fashioned sound of the verses are great. Good work. 
 
If you are looking for a light read, try my limerick "My Socks". But don't feel pressured.

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Zoe-22-Turner replied...
Dec. 10, 2012 at 11:15 pm

thank you everybody for the feedback :) and Knits, i love writing with the old timey sound. i find it so beautiful.

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