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The Mysterious girl stands by her mothers grave in the oldest grave yard in the town. It is a dark and stormy night. She vowed that they would pay for what they had done. She vowed that she would get revenge. Some how she will.


On the other side of town the most famous ballet dancer, Clare de Lune, was preforming in on Broadway, the most famous theater district in all the country. She does not know it yet but this will be the last night that she will preform in front of an audience. It will be in fact the last time she will be able to dance for a very long time.


She didn't see the trip wire. When she danced across the stage to the far left, she tripped and fell right off the stage. She was rushed off to the hospital very soon after. As everyone stood up gasping at the sight of the fallen dancer, a dark figure left the concert hall. The dancer was told that she had a broken leg and rib and a sprained wrist and collar bone. The doctors informed her that she was very lucky to be alive.


The Mysterious girl sits in the house that belonged to her mother before she had died. In her mother's will it stated that everything that she owned would go to her daughter but the lawyers could not locate the missing girl. They had been looking all over the town in search for her. Once they found her they were to read the will to her, then they would take her to an orphanage and put her up for adoption. They would sell off the house and all of the furniture and take the money, in the bank account her mother had made for her, for themselves. That would all happen if they could find the girl. They were all about the money they cared nothing for the girl. Until they found her they would never get the money.


The Mysterious girl lies on her bed in her room. It is more of a mansion than a house. The mansion was built during the Renaissance time period. The Mysterious girl sits thinking back to the night when her mother was killed.


It had happened almost a month ago. The day began as a bright and sunny day. Mom and me did what they always did on a Monday. We first went to the local donut shop and bought two dozen donuts and some donut holes. Then we went to the library to turn in their books and spend two hours, exactly, looking at and reading other books. After we left the library we went to the mom's work. Mom works as a seamstress. I usually go with my mom to work with her. I have been home schooled all my life so I don't have to worry about going to school. It was about 8:30 PM when the Mom is locking up the dress store and getting ready to leave. It happened when we were about half way home. I could tell that mom was uneasy because she kept looking behind and around her. What happened next the I will never forget. When the we where well away from the street they attacked. Mom was looking behind her when a dark figure dropped out of a nearby tree. The figure was wearing a dark cloak with a hat pulled down low over it's face so the I couldn’t tell who it was. As I screamed as the dark figure lept over and put a drugged cloth over my mouth and nose. As I was going under I herd my mom cry out. The dark figure ran over to my mom putting a knife to her throat saying “ You have defied me and for that you will die.” The figure killed my mom, left her on the ground and ran to the police station dressed as a different person. The dark figure told the police that they had seen a woman drug her daughter and then kill her self. After further questioning the person was free to go. When the police arrived at the scene they saw the dead body of the woman but no girl. It turned out that the girl had awakened earlier, seen her mothers body, and left without saying a word. She went back to the house and went to bed as if nothing had happened. The police identified the woman and found out where she lived. After searching the house, they proclaimed that it was empty. Ever since then the I have never been happy. Now all that I wear is a black cloak and I only go out of the house when I have too. I will not rest until the killer is found and I am going to get my revenge.


The Mysterious girl lies down and goes to sleep with one tear running down her cheek. She has vowed that she will not rest till she finds the killer.

TO BE CONTINUED.....



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BookFreak14 said...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 3:36 pm
Alright... I just submitted This part of my story. I fixed it so it should be easier to fallow. Anyway, I also submitted the next part for the first chapter. I will post on here when they are avalible. 
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 3, 2011 at 10:02 am
This is rather good. Like Garnet77 said, other than typos, this is a great piece of work. Keep up the good work :)
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 3, 2011 at 10:04 am
Yeh I will be reposting it with all the typos fixed... It will be better. Thanks for reading it... I will be posting the rest of this story soon.:)
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 2:20 pm
Great :) I have the 5th bit of my work pending approval.
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 3:24 pm
musicprincess: Awesome... Which One? I can't wait to read it:)
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 7, 2011 at 8:02 am
More of Silver Tears. This upcoming bit was my 2nd favorite bit to write.
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 7, 2011 at 9:54 am
Cool... I loved that story... I can't wait for more... You are a great writer.... 
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 7, 2011 at 11:15 am
Thanks :) you are too!
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 8, 2011 at 9:59 am
Thanks:) so what are your plans for the summer?
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 11, 2011 at 1:14 pm
Writing...more writing and hopefully getting more of my story up.
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 13, 2011 at 10:19 am
Awesome... I can't wait to read it:) Hope to read more from you:)
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 13, 2011 at 4:51 pm
I might start a thread to discuss our writings.
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 9:09 am
I totally agree... Wait what would the thread be called?
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 1:20 pm
Umm, I'll put it under the love advice forum as "Writing Discussion"
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 4:48 pm
Okay I will check it out:) So what will we be talking about?
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 15, 2011 at 3:59 pm
Anything, really. We can discuss your writing, mine, what we're up to. Just chatting. Sound good?
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 17, 2011 at 5:19 pm
Sounds Awesome!!!   
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 21, 2011 at 2:05 pm
Alright, it's up :)
 
BookFreak14 replied...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 4:04 pm
Okay... What is it called? Hang on While I look for it.
 
musicprincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 24, 2011 at 2:02 pm
Ok, the new chapter is up :) It's called writing discussion and it's in the love, dating and relationships forum.
 
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