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Something was too familiar about the place I was in. Though I didn’t remember ever visiting it, somehow it was like a second home. But I didn’t feel very welcome.
The sweet smell of cologne comforted me as I walked through the tangled vines, not sure where I was going.
The soft voices continued to whisper in my ears, but I couldn’t make out the sentences. Things that sounded like, “I love you,” and “I promise,” were being said, but the whole sentence was too blurry to make any sense.
“Desirae,” someone whisper-sang. It was a lady’s voice. I whirled around and looked to the right. No one was there. I moved my gaze to the left, but still, I couldn’t see her.
“Desirae!” now a man was calling my name. It overlapped the woman’s note, but didn’t go on as long. The voices were so familiar, but I couldn't put my finger on to whom they belonged to.
A swarm of bats swooped overhead, and I ducked with a yelp. After they passed I stood up, and watched them fly away towards the north side of the woods. Slowly I started to walk again, bringing my left foot forward. I made the mistake of pressing it down on a thin twig. Not only was the cracking startling, but it echoed through the deserted woods, and the image in my mind of nasty creatures awakening wasn’t pleasant.

“Desirae!” the whispers were getting fainter by the minute, and if I didn’t hurry, everything was going to disappear like it had the last millions of times that I had been here. Wherever “here” was….

All of a sudden my breaths started shortening as I continued through the woods, looking for… whatever I was looking for. Yet even not knowing where I was heading, I tried speeding up so I could catch them this time. Whoever they were.

“Desiraaeee!” I heard the whisper again. The voice was sweet and soothing now.

I made it to that tiny building. The red one, with that little XX sign over the entrance. It had always been there. Every time I was here…
I slowly walked into it, not ready for what I was about to see. I looked down at the floor, and there I was, dead. Pail skin and a knife stabbed through my chest. Blood was sliding down my torso, and settling in a puddle which I was lying in. And all’s I could think of to do was scream.




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Toothfairy said...
Sept. 21, 2012 at 9:12 am:
Sounds really scary gives me chills.
 
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Wearing_WestwoodThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 17, 2012 at 10:00 am:

This was really good!  It was definately suspensful and nightmarish.

However, in the last paragraph you said your skin was "pail", it should be "pale"

but other than that it was brilliantly written!  Keep up the good work!

 
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TouchOfARose said...
Nov. 18, 2011 at 8:32 pm:

I got chills, and the hairs on my neck raised up and everything! This was awesome!

You should write a sequel! pretty pllleeaaase??  ;D

I loved how you slowly built up suspense. It was extremely good! Keep writing! (:

 
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Nightsiren said...
May 26, 2011 at 8:12 am:
This was awesome! I got chills!
 
Little-Miss replied...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 11:28 am :
thanks! And that's good! :)
 
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vampiresrock said...
Jan. 14, 2011 at 10:35 am:
it was pretty good
 
Little-Miss replied...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 11:27 am :
thank-you!
 
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BOSSES . said...
Dec. 1, 2010 at 7:42 am:
wow . that story was cool .
 
BABYGIRL replied...
Dec. 1, 2010 at 7:45 am :
YOU SHOULD THAT WAS ALSOME
 
DUMMiE QUANY ? replied...
Dec. 1, 2010 at 7:49 am :
WHAT ARE YOU SAYING ?
 
Katherine_R replied...
Dec. 1, 2010 at 3:48 pm :
Thank-you!
 
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clydebunny said...
Dec. 1, 2010 at 7:40 am:
great story you should make a prt2
 
Katherine_R replied...
Dec. 1, 2010 at 3:47 pm :
I'll defiantly think about it. This was written awhile ago though, and supposed to be a part of a novel that's been revised with new names. That's why it's not written very well.
 
Little-Miss replied...
Dec. 22, 2010 at 5:47 pm :

I spelled definitely wrong* :P and just to let you know, I have written the prequel; unfortunately teenink is taking a very long time to let me post the link, so if you would like to read it now, you can look through my work. It's entitled "The Vision (A Prequel to The Nightmare)"

Enjoy(:

 
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Diana101This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 6:29 pm:
I love your story! It was so amazing! Hey, check out my story, Murder of Guilt:)
 
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Runninghorse said...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 6:18 pm:
You did a great job! I love spooky stories and I wright them myself! But I also write adventure stories! Hey check out my story, its called Just another day in the life of a teen!
 
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298777 said...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 10:56 am:
this was a great story.
 
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nordgirl said...
May 17, 2010 at 6:57 pm:
That was very good! I say this link from yahooanswers. Would you rate my work. (Breeze or Light please)
 
Katherine_R replied...
May 18, 2010 at 9:54 am :
Thanks, and I'll go read and rate right now! (:
 
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Identified-Sarah. said...
May 16, 2010 at 5:37 pm:
It was very well written, and had a good story line, I'd love to hear the rest of it!
 
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