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The Recap

September 29, 2009
By criminalninja<33 SILVER, Hidalgo, Texas
criminalninja<33 SILVER, Hidalgo, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"things are only as beautiful as u percieve them"


He wasn't a superhero, although he might have been. He was an illusion of my imagination. He seemed to follow me everywhere I might have located myself. Few times, I found this a bit frightening, but the feeling was starting to feel like anything in life that we'd glance and not find anything unusual.
I clandestinely creeped down the darkest ally in my city. The vibe was displeasing ,but it was the quickest path to get home. It was tremendously late and the city was about ready to turn off their lights. The echoing of an annonymous object caught me off guard. My legs wanted to give up with the feeling of the slightest breeze, but I had to make it home unharmed. I remained focus and bombed out the thoughts of anything that might spook me. The wind's speed arose and suddenly, from the middle of nowhere, a shadow crept out slowly. It was a person in the darkest charcoal black coat ever sewn together. It appeared to me that he was wearing a black top hat to match his mysterious looking outfit. He seemed to wanting to grin ,but his look wasn't at all safe. I could feel tension rising within me; whatever he might have been plotting I bet I'd soon have to face. The shadow crept closer to me every single nanosecond, his devious look threatened me, and I had no idea what I could do so that I could escape safely.
Soon, he was right next to me. A shiny gun was ready to kill me and I was just there,...still. The guy pulled the trigger and it quickly came to me that I'd seen this happen before. Somewhere.
I looked at myself and it was soon clear. I hadn't been killed. The ally belonged to me now. I would be living there for quite a while. No life was in sight of this alley. Not even me,... for I too was lifeless. Nobody was following me, it was just a recap on an old heartbreaking event. I'd hadn't been able to speak to my family withoug a response, and every time I attempted to go back to to my house I just ended up in the alley again. It all made sense. There was no point to it at all,...I was now a part of this alley and nothing at all ,but a lurking, almost real life ghostly shadow.


The author's comments:
It was written just right now withing 15-20 minutes. My first attempt on this and I'm too eager to wait to submit something I actually spent time writing. Hope its comprehendable enough! Thanks for your time.

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on Dec. 27 2010 at 8:02 am
whateverjuliet BRONZE, Miami, Florida
3 articles 3 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
true love never dies,it only gets stronger with time.

that was realy good! i love these kinds of stories!

on Aug. 18 2010 at 11:11 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

The story is well written, and very suspenceful, but the ending seems confuzing to me... but maybe that is a good thing, because I know I'll be thinking about its meaning.

By the way, can whoever sees this read some of my stories, rate, and critisize? I'd appreciate it.


mandiuw said...
on Oct. 17 2009 at 10:21 am
oh, i like it i wouldnt have said anything bad about it but my teacher makes us write comments and i didnt know what else to say so i just wrote that.

on Oct. 16 2009 at 6:55 pm
criminalninja<33 SILVER, Hidalgo, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"things are only as beautiful as u percieve them"

thanx i was just a bit eager to post something because i was a new comer

so i took about 10minutes to type something out real fast(:

yeah i wondered when someone would comment about the ending. its perplexing even to me haha sorry though

on Oct. 16 2009 at 3:07 pm
dragonfan SILVER, Arcidia, Indiana
9 articles 1 photo 213 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Death truly makes an artist"

this is amazing!I loved it .I was confused the first time i read it but when i re-read it i understood. Keep up the great work!

casariom said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 4:19 pm
This story is fantastic, the beginning of the story was intense and caught my attention. I like when you said "...a shadow crept out slowly. It was a person in the darkest charcoal black coat ever sewn together." That created a lot of suspense in the story and it also made me want to read more. The end of the story threw me off guard. You would not expect when ever you got shot you would stay alive. This story is also a great lesson to be more careful and to examine your surroundings.

casariom said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 4:16 pm
This story is fantastic, the begining of the story was intese and caught my attention. I like when you said "...a shadow crept out slowly. It was a person in the darkest charcoal black coat ever sewn together." That created alot of suspense in the story and it also made me want to read more. The end of the story threw me off gard. You would not exspect when ever you got shot you would stay alive. This story is also a great leason to be more carful and to examin your suroundings.

on Oct. 14 2009 at 12:15 pm
this is a great lesson too! i wonder where ppl find these great ideas in their heads!!!

on Oct. 11 2009 at 10:00 am
barbestbcb BRONZE, Brooklin, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them" - Walt Disney

This was a great article... i found it really good.