Stuck in the Past MAG

November 4, 2014
By Icithra PLATINUM, Arlington, Massachusetts
Icithra PLATINUM, Arlington, Massachusetts
26 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
The wastebasket is a writer's best friend. ~Isaac Bashevis Singer


Tom sniffled, his nose red from pollen. It was the Spring Fair, and all the lovely pink dogwood trees in the town park were flowering. Tom resented them for it. More flowers, more pollen. He took a greasy rag from his greasy slacks and wiped the sweat off his face.

Next to Tom was his pride and joy: the world’s first time machine. It had taken him months of scrounging for parts at the auto mechanics shop where he worked, but he finally had a working engine. At least, he hoped it worked. The fair would be its maiden voyage.

The first people began to trickle into the park, walking along the pleasant little dirt path and dodging the most outgoing of the vendors. Cries of “Oranges! Fresh oranges!” and “Sweetest corn cakes you can buy!” started to fill the air, along with the smell of dough hitting the deep fryer.

One of Tom’s friends from school sauntered up. He was a cook at the town’s only restaurant, and he still had on the stained apron. “Hey, uh, hey, man. Whatcha, uh, whatcha whatcha got here?” His voice was shifty, and he kept checking over his shoulder nervously. It was a habit of his, compounded by a small criminal record.

“It’s a time machine,” Tom said proudly, sticking his hands in his pocket and standing straighter. Tom didn’t like to elaborate on things. Excessive English usage was for school.

Zack laughed. “Sure, uh, sure it is, man. Are you, uh, going to, to use it?”

“Yes,” Tom said.

Zack waved his arms, trying to eke some more information from his friend.

“I will give a demonstration in five minutes,” Tom said, gesturing toward a dial on the engine that was, indeed, counting down.

Zack raised his eyebrows. “Are you sure that’s, that’s a time machine? Looks like, uh, like a car engine.” Zack didn’t like standing still, and began shifting his weight from foot to foot.

“There are parts of a car engine in it,” Tom said, nodding. Sweat trickled down his bare chest and under his suspender straps.

“Great, uh, great, man.”

“Could you tell others to come for the demonstration?” Tom asked. No one else had come to see his time machine.

“Sure, man,” Zack said, and wandered off into the now large crowd. Tom watched a couple enter the park – a woman in a frilly pink dress and a sun umbrella, and a man in a suit. Their arms were linked.

“Hello there, young man,” a voice said from behind Tom. Tom didn’t jump or start but slowly turned around and looked at the pastor from North Elmwood United Methodist. Standing next to him was the pastor from South Elmwood United Methodist. They were both wearing suits and bowler hats and looked like twins, which was fitting, since they were.

“Hello, pastors,” Tom said, politely. Tom went to East Elmwood Catholic but tried not to get on the bad side of the United Methodist ministers. They both had quite intimidating girths.

“What do you have here?” one asked. Tom didn’t know their names.

“A time machine.”

“Really?” the other said, disbelieving.

“Yes,” Tom said.

“I think no manly device could have a power that is God’s alone.” They started to walk away.

“Stay for the demonstration, please. It’s in two minutes.”

One checked his watch. “Okay, young Tom. We shall see this play out.” They stood together, waiting.

Zack walked up to Tom again. Behind him was a collection of kids from the high school. Some were laughing and pointing at the time machine. Others had arched eyebrows and skeptical looks. “Here’s, uh, here’s your audience, Tom,” Zack said.

“Thanks,” Tom said. “The pastors will watch too.”

“Great, man.”

One of the kids, a tall strong boy from the rugby team, spoke up. “Yo, man! You saying this stupid lookin’ car engine o’ yours is gonna take me back in time?

“All of us back in time,” Tom corrected.

“Yeah? I don’t believe you. When’s it gonna happen?”

Tom looked at the dial on the engine. “In twenty seconds it will have enough energy to take us back in time ten seconds.”

A kid laughed; more joined in. Zack looked nervous, glancing at Tom. “You, uh, you sure, man?”

“Yes. In seven seconds it will take us back ten seconds.” Tom sniffed and rubbed his nose. Stupid allergies. “Ready?” He looked at the small crowd that had gathered. The couple he had seen walking had come to watch. They all looked at him expectantly. “3 … 2 … 1 … G–”

“Yes. In seven seconds it will take us back ten seconds.” Tom sniffed and rubbed his nose. Stupid allergies. “Ready?” He looked at the small crowd that had gathered. The couple he had seen walking had come to watch. They all looked at him expectantly. “3 … 2 … 1 … G–”

“Yes. In seven seconds it will take us back ten seconds.” Tom sniffed and rubbed his nose. Stupid allergies. “Ready?” He looked at the small crowd that had gathered. The couple he had seen walking had come to watch. They all looked at him expectantly. “3 … 2 … 1 … G–”



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on Jan. 2 2016 at 4:22 am
EmmaMayWang GOLD, Pelham, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"It is art, and art only, that reveals us to ourselves."
- Oscar Wilde

Haha I loved the ending!

zmo17 said...
on Sep. 13 2015 at 11:45 am
zmo17, Aliso Viejo, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Have I not commanded you? Be strong and courageous. Do not be afraid; do not be discouraged, for the Lord your God will be with you wherever you go.” - Joshua 1:9

This was a really good story, and it was a great lead in to the time loop, where it made perfect sense for it to happen.

on May. 1 2015 at 7:02 am
Icithra PLATINUM, Arlington, Massachusetts
26 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
The wastebasket is a writer's best friend. ~Isaac Bashevis Singer

Sorry, there isn't any more. I wanted to use the least words possible to still make a good story, and to get my point across. Unfortunately for my characters, they are stuck like that forever.

on Apr. 30 2015 at 5:32 am
SupremeAwesomeness, Pensby, Wirral, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I can be weirder.

Wicked story. Is there any more, or are they stuck like that forever?

on Apr. 11 2015 at 6:24 pm
zacsonic1216 SILVER, Easton, Pennsylvania
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Great story best ending ever

on Apr. 6 2015 at 11:00 pm
SaraCattt PLATINUM, Shelton, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"I am and always will be the optimist. The hoper of far flung hopes, the dreamer of improbable dreams."- The Eleventh Doctor

This of course causes a question: Are we caught in a time loop? Love this!

on Apr. 1 2015 at 5:07 pm
benyewest SILVER, Katy, Texas
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Awesome stuff! It reminded me of a video game called Chrono Trigger, and in the beginning of it one of the characters is presenting a time machine at a fair. I'm not sure if that was your inspiration or anything, but it was still a great story.

IMSteel BRONZE said...
on Jan. 5 2015 at 8:22 am
IMSteel BRONZE, Wallhala, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Learn from Yesterday, live for Today, hope for Tomorrow" - Albert Einstein

"Brevity is the Soul of Wit" - The Which

Whoa! Are they completely caught in a time-loop? That was an awesome story! The build-up was nicely carried out, and the ending left me excited. I do have one question though: is the main character a young genius? It seems a little far-fetched that a high-schooler would be able to build a time-machine out of old car-engines. Other than that, you'll see any other problems yourself, I don't see anything else worth criticizing. This was an intriguing story, and I look forward to reading more of your work.


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