Monster

September 11, 2009
By Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?


As I'm sitting here, in this box-shaped room, staring at my prey three feet away from me, I am anxious. This child, an innocent child, will die. She is nothing to me, nothing at all. When she wakes, only then will she notice my presence. She is sleeping calmly, probably dreaming sweet childish fantasies of blue skies and purple unicorns flying to see a magical princess. Little does she know that in a few short hours her rosey red complexion will fade away to meet a dull white color. Little does she know that the curls that surround her face will fade and cover a life-less dull face. Little does she know of her radiant blue eyes fading with the sunset. Unlike the sun, her eyes will never surface again.

~Little does she know of the monster I am~


The author's comments:
This was written for my creative writing class. Let's just say the teacher was a little worred.

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OmniLit2000 said...
on Jun. 4 at 8:48 pm
OmniLit2000, Elk Grove, California
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Favorite Quote:
"We keep moving forward, opening new doors, and doing new things, because we're curious and curiosity keeps leading us down new paths." -Walt Disney

I had a story written for my creative writing class. It's called "The Caged Beast". Go check it out please and I would like some feedback, please.

on May. 22 2013 at 8:03 pm
imhereforthethought PLATINUM, Wayne, New Jersey
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Please write more! This is very good and exciting!

LauraC BRONZE said...
on Apr. 2 2013 at 2:12 am
LauraC BRONZE, Medford, Oregon
2 articles 2 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a risk, so chance it. Life is chance, so risk it. Life is a new world, so explore it.
-LauraC

I like it. hope you got a good grade on it.

on Mar. 6 2013 at 12:00 pm
Funkyman BRONZE, Waco, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 14 comments
i like the 'monster'

on Mar. 2 2013 at 1:10 pm
BlackbeltJames GOLD, Reading, Other
14 articles 0 photos 193 comments

Favorite Quote:
Isaac Asimov - "Intelligence is an accident of evolution, and not necessarily an advantage.”

Absolutely brilliant, I love this piece, it inspired me myself to start writing flash fiction. It is so powerful for such a short piece. It's very emotive and thought provoking.

on Feb. 19 2013 at 6:17 pm
Miniterror GOLD, Yuma, Arizona
10 articles 1 photo 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For God so loved the world that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believes in Him should not perish but have everlasting life." John 3:16

It is a good flash fiction piece. I think you might be able to make a longer story that leads up to this moment, then the events following if you can think of something.

on Nov. 1 2012 at 9:12 pm
Giggles15 PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
47 articles 3 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Good Night, Sleep Tight, Don't let the Dead Bite" (Hollywood Undead) and "Ah, Gravity, thou' art a heartless b***h" (Sheldon says on big bang theory)

This is great! I can see why your teacher would be worried but eh I personally like these kind of things :) it is VERY creative and yet it has a bit of WOAH O_O to it lol

on Oct. 29 2012 at 11:25 am
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
22 articles 0 photos 281 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

Please continue!!! This is really good

on Aug. 27 2012 at 6:38 pm
RandiRose SILVER, New York, New York
5 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
You must be the change you wish to see in the world.

I really liked it, you should continue on with it! Will you please check out my work and tell me what you think?

on Aug. 1 2012 at 6:47 pm
imhereforthethought PLATINUM, Wayne, New Jersey
43 articles 0 photos 45 comments
Write a sequel please. This is a very interesting story. Pease check out my work if you liked this.

Varlen-Byrd said...
on Jul. 10 2012 at 7:58 pm
Varlen-Byrd, Santa Cruz, California
0 articles 1 photo 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Imperfection is beauty, madness is genius and it's better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring.”

I really like how you told the story from the monster's point of view. It's a pretty cool twist. 

on May. 27 2012 at 10:48 pm
KateLovesMusicAndArt BRONZE, Mesa, Arizona
4 articles 20 photos 32 comments
This is very interesting and different. I LOVE IT!

troubledsoul said...
on Apr. 8 2012 at 11:32 am
troubledsoul, ., Other
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'm battling monsters, I'm pulling you out of the burning buildings/ and you say I'll give you anything but you never come through.”

I love this so much <3 
I can see why your teacher was worried ;)

troubledsoul said...
on Apr. 8 2012 at 11:32 am
troubledsoul, ., Other
0 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'm battling monsters, I'm pulling you out of the burning buildings/ and you say I'll give you anything but you never come through.”

I love this so much <3 
I can see why your teacher was worried ;)

GeeGi BRONZE said...
on Mar. 14 2012 at 8:23 pm
GeeGi BRONZE, Park City, Utah
3 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Being crazy isn't enough.”
― Dr. Seuss

“Why fit in when you were born to stand out?”
― Dr. Seuss

It's impressive that you were able to bring all that emotion and thought with so little words. It's great! If anyone wants to, could you please read my story? It's called The Story of the Demons. If you do, that would be great :)

on Mar. 7 2012 at 12:39 pm
BT1718 PLATINUM, Worthington, Ohio
24 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
dream as if youll live forever live as if youll die today

that was good truly

NightFury said...
on Feb. 6 2012 at 8:00 pm
NightFury, Innocence, California
0 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everyday's a gift and not a given right."

Really good!

herky said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 1:47 pm
herky, Post Falls, Idaho
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments
LOL that is awesome!!!!!!!!!!! and a little creepy

on Dec. 5 2011 at 7:04 am
PinkNinjaHater SILVER, China, Chengdu, Other
8 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everybody has photographic memory, just not everybody had film.

GREAT job I love your symbols and it was awesome...fantastic

on Nov. 30 2011 at 3:10 pm
BibliophileFreak BRONZE, Deatsville, Alabama
3 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
A kiss makes the heart young again and wipes out the years.
-Rupert Brooke

I like this. I like a little crazy in my bowl of Capn' Crunch!


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