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He said not to stand so close to the edge.
So, I didn't .
I walked in the middle of the road, the world stretching out in front.
But lost in his gaze I don't hear, I don't see, the truck. Barreling down.
It was gaining speed, when he took my hand.
He said we were kings, queens, royalty. I smiled.
He said to stop.
We waited.
The noise grew louder, a strangled cry.
He said he loved me and took my hand.
Then the truck hit.
I swear its bliss.
Like floating on Cloud 9




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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
today at 6:07 pm:
Great poem, albeit it's in the fiction section. Great title. It totally drew me in. And that ending—wow! Was not expecting it. I felt the emotion and the suspense at the end. Had my attention all the way through. 
 
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dagnytaggartThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 25 at 6:22 pm:
This was really good! This poem is so... free, I love how you write without any restraints - it can hold so much meaning to so many people because of that.
 
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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 3 at 7:16 pm:
Oh. Oh my god! This was absolutely amazing. I can not even put into words how perfect this is. Stunning. This is beautiful and I love this so much. You're such an AMAZING writer. I tried to put this into my favorites but it's saying there's an error right now. This will be in my favorites soon enough. You're great! Xx!
 
Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 4 at 11:57 am :
thanks! your one of my favorites too!
 
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JRayeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 27 at 10:02 am:
Oh my goodness! I love this, so so so good! Keep it up :)
 
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ShadowpomgurlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 14 at 5:36 pm:
wow, omg, that was UNEXPECTED!!!! that was a super good piece..was it sposed to be a poem or a short story? either way, beautiful and poignant!
 
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