Him...

September 24, 2009
By EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."


My heart melts in two when I see him, one half falling head-over-heels for his smile and the other half regretting my love. I am just sooo confused. I know he is a jerk, it's just... Not when I'm around him, he's so sweet around me. I mean, I just can't decide, if I should even try to move on or keep hope. I'm on a road of indecision. A road that is rocky and depressing yet sweet surprises along the way. It's hard, I have tried to stop thinking about him and that doesn't help or WORK. I still think about him everyday, and I always think about when we danced. When we danced, my heart skipped a million beats, my eyelashes fluttered, my hair flew, and we laughed and smiled. It was the best night of my life, except I know he doesn't like me as a girlfriend, but I don't care. I will wait for him. I am listening to this saying, "Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about." So, so far, I have decided that I am still trying to catch his eye. Our friendship was a huge rope. As the years passed by, I knew that our relationship became thinner and thinner. Before I knew what was happening the rope I had always counted on, became a thin yarn. I have tried making this yarn into a rope again, but it never works. I have tried and tried, but he never looks at me the same way anymore. He used to look me in the eyes, and his eyes would linger there. They were glued to me as if I was the only person in the world. Now, he looks for a second and then just smiles. He liked me but now it is too late. HE has moved on, and so should I. I can't. I am stuck in quicksand. He left me by myself. I was standing frozen by his eyes. He smiled, and then walked away. Now, I am sinking slowly in quicksand. He will not pull me out now. He has passed. Now, I will too. Eventually....



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on Nov. 9 2009 at 6:20 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Thank you to everyone who commented!!!

I really appreciate it!!! Look out for some of my new work which I submitted a couple of weeks ago, I hope you like it. ;)

on Nov. 9 2009 at 7:04 am
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Thanks so much!!!!!

;)

Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 7 2009 at 6:46 pm
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

I know exactly how you feel. Great job and thanks for the comment!

-Blessed Be!

+++ZERO+++

on Oct. 30 2009 at 6:51 pm
Annaxoxo SILVER, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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Hey Em, I loved it!!!! ;)

on Oct. 30 2009 at 5:53 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

No, thank you for reading it!

I'm so happy you liked it!

:)

on Oct. 29 2009 at 7:45 pm
rAinDroPsdRip SILVER, Fairfield, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
\\\"never give up on something you cant go a day withouth thinking about\\\" \\\"carpe diem\\\"

your right! i do appreciate this and that quote you put in there is my new fav. thanks a bunch!

on Oct. 22 2009 at 4:31 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

P.S. I will always stick to that saying.

on Oct. 22 2009 at 4:30 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

I am so happy you like my writing!!!!!!

Thanks a million for commenting!!!

:)

melone96 said...
on Oct. 21 2009 at 8:29 pm
melone96, White Sulphur Springs, West Virginia
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I love this! It reminds me so much of my personal experience! Keep writing! And stick to that saying!!! I DO! :D

on Oct. 21 2009 at 4:38 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Thanks so much!!!!!

Look out for my new work!

I <3 you for commenting!!!

on Oct. 21 2009 at 4:37 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

I am smiling a ton right now!!!

It's all that I can dream that people like my work!!

Thanks sooooooooo much!!!!! :)

on Oct. 21 2009 at 12:08 pm
emmatheballerina GOLD, Tacoma, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"It is not in our greatest glory in never falling, but in rising everytime we fall"
"I use to want the words "she tried" on my tombstone, now I want "she did it"

I really loved the line Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about. that was my favorite part! keep writing. you have some creative ideas

allie n. said...
on Oct. 20 2009 at 5:45 pm
this was really good! i love how you truly capture the emotions of being heartbroken over a guy you can't have. i read this and my mind immediately flew to my own personal experience. everything you wrote was literally EVERYTHING i felt. good job

on Oct. 19 2009 at 6:05 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Wow! You are the best! I love getting comments from people that really like what I wrote! Thank you so much!!!! I'll will have out a new story soon! ;)

on Oct. 19 2009 at 6:04 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Thanks so much!

Your comment made me smile!

Thanks again and look out for more writing of mine!

Thanks again! :)

Quaglieria said...
on Oct. 19 2009 at 4:19 pm
Your story was excellent! I could really picture the different actions in your writing. The manner in which you described how the girl felt was amazing. The first sentence was strong and powerful. "My heart melts in two when I see him, one half falling head-over-heels for his smile and the other half regretting my love." I can picture a girl not knowing what to do when she likes someone. I liked when she said "I'm on the road of indecison." I thought it was very clever. Also, you compared the friendship between the two of them to a rope. It shows their just how strong their frienship was. Then, you stated, "Before I knew....... became a thin yarn." It shows how their relationship is turning out. You do not just planly say "Our relationship is falling apart." You describe how you feel in a unique way. You did have a few minor errors, but your story was most excellent. Keep up the good work!

thomasb said...
on Oct. 19 2009 at 3:16 pm
Wow your story was amazing! I could see and feel how bad the character felt when he stopped really noticing her when you said, “I have tried and tried, but he never looks at me the same way anymore. He used to look me in the eyes, and his eyes would linger there. They were glued to me as if I was the only person in the world. Now, he looks for a second and then just smiles. He liked me but now it is too late. HE has moved on, and so should I. I can't. I am stuck in quicksand. He left me by myself. I was standing frozen by his eyes. He smiled, and then walked away. Now, I am sinking slowly in quicksand. He will not pull me out now. He has passed. Now, I will too. Eventually....”. I love your ending when you say, “ Now I will too. Eventually…” because I can see that she is really upset and that she is trying to be strong and move on like he did, but she cannot because she really liked him and she thought he liked her too but he moved on.

on Oct. 17 2009 at 9:25 am
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Thanks, Ansie!!!!!!

I'll be writing more!!

luv ya soo much, <3333333 xoxo

on Oct. 17 2009 at 9:23 am
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Thanks, for your support, Jen. Love ya soooo much!!!!!

<33333 I will be writing more!!

on Oct. 17 2009 at 9:21 am
jenx0x3 DIAMOND, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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wow emma i <3 it sooo much especially the ending sentences "he passed and so will I eventually.." i love it!!


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