Secret

September 26, 2009
By EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide


“The way I see it, you have two choices.” He said declaratively “you can kiss me, He moved closer, or you can walk away and go your whole life wondering how it would be.” She smiled lightly and took a step toward him.
“The way I see it…” He waited “is that your right.” He was so close to her suddenly that her heart began to sputter and her blood boiled violently. She couldn’t keep her thoughts to herself and that intrigued him immensely.
“Your adorable cleare, you know I will never let you have the satisfaction of knowing how it is to be without me.” He smiled again and put his hands on both sides of her face, bending down to kiss her. The kiss started off normal the way a kiss normally does when it’s the first, but once she met his lips with hers she couldn’t help but take a breath and that drove him wild. He pulled her toward him swiftly and they were molded into each other. There was so much heat, so much passion that the air around them got hot and muggy though it was the middle of winter in the little Chicago town. He let her go and held her an inch away from him. Her eyes were glowing and he could tell she wanted nothing more than to stay with him as long as she could.
“I really wish you wouldn’t read my mind Jake” she breathed. “It’s intimidating.”
Cleare and Jake had known each other since 4th grade and ever since then they had been inseparable and together. Now it was junior year and they could no longer resist the temptation between them, But Jake had a secret. A secret worse than that of what Cleare knew. She loved him so much and he loved her, but will this secret rip them apart?



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on Oct. 19 2012 at 4:51 am
JuliaRuby SILVER, Melbourne, Other
8 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you will land among the stars
By Les Brown

i think you should write part two. love it

on Sep. 27 2012 at 8:35 pm
prettysoccer_girl34 SILVER, Park City, Utah
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OOOO This is a really good piece! You should have a part 2 to this because I know i will read that part! Everyone probably wants to know the secret! Please keep writing! :)

on Jun. 9 2012 at 5:34 pm
GodSpell98 GOLD, Lincoln, Nebraska
18 articles 1 photo 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"THE HUNKY-DORY THING ZAPPED ME!!" or "“We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of dreams”. or anything from Lord of the Rings or Star Trek.

Really good so far! One thing--and I bug everyone about this, even my BFF's--plz don't forget quotation marks! Puncuation mistakes are my biggest pet peeve, sorry. :) But I love your style, and I can't wait to read more!! Great job, and keep writing!

on Jun. 9 2012 at 11:54 am
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

o my gosh!!! good for you! I really hope u get published? has it come out yet? i commented further up by the way. hey will u check out my work? id really love your imput. (SOrry bout the spelling)

on Jun. 9 2012 at 11:52 am
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

i dont think sprinkles are overrated! but gummy bears ARE much better. i love this work! but i want to know the secret soooooo bad. i have to know! WHat is it?

on Apr. 26 2012 at 1:15 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

Thank you so much! I did finish this story, this is the prologue but I'm not going to put it on here because I'm dealing with a publisher actually :) 

on Apr. 26 2012 at 10:44 am
ashley112027 BRONZE, Grand Rapids, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All you need is 20 seconds of insane courage. Just literally 20 seconds of embarrassing bravery, and I promise you, something great will come out of it."

I loved your writing.. :) More please!

on Apr. 4 2012 at 2:44 pm
Zuccini75 BRONZE, Chantilly, Virginia
1 article 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is better to keep your mouth shut and let people wonder, than telling them yourself."
-Myself

all caps... wow - I need to know too! Pretty please... with gummy bears on top? (sprinkles are so overrated)

on Jan. 11 2012 at 1:44 pm
Goddess PLATINUM, Connellsville, Pennsylvania
27 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today.”

WHATS THE SECRET?!?!?!? I NEED TO KNOW!!!

on Jan. 11 2012 at 1:44 pm
Goddess PLATINUM, Connellsville, Pennsylvania
27 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today.”

WHATS THE SECRET?????? WHAT HAPPENS NEXT??? I GOTTA KNOW!!

on Dec. 21 2011 at 5:00 pm
Dancing2222 GOLD, Sandy, Utah
10 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be yourself, everyone else is taken."
"Imagination is more important that knowledge" -Albert Einstein
"Don't ever frown, you never know who's going to fall in love with your smile."

WHAT HAPPENS?!?!?!? I HAVE TO KNOW!!!!!! POST MORE PLEASE.....

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on Nov. 24 2011 at 8:20 pm
-Duckie- GOLD, West Fargo, North Dakota
18 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your heart is a weapon the size of your fist. Keep fighting. Keep loving.
-Anonymous

Agree... What is the secret!?

on Nov. 2 2011 at 9:27 pm
dancing.inthe.rain GOLD, Bowling Green, Kentucky
15 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We all fear death and question our place in the universe. The artist's job is not to subcome to dispair, but to find an antidote for the emptiness of existance." -Gertrude Stein in the movie Midnight In Paris.

i love it !

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on Nov. 2 2011 at 4:03 pm
Alantis SILVER, Connersville, Indiana
6 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love hurts weither its right or wrong.

FANTASTIC!!!!

on Oct. 16 2011 at 3:49 pm
XxilybbyxX SILVER, Saginaw, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sometimes we build up walls, not to keep people out; but to see who cares enough to break them down.

OMIGOSH!!!! YOUJ HAVE TO FINISH THIS!!! you can't  just leave me hanging like that!!! wow! ur good!!!! :)

 


on Oct. 11 2011 at 3:16 pm
ChocoMint SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is like swallowing hot chocolate before it has cooled off. It takes you by surprise at first, but keeps you warm for a long time." - Anonymous

"Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss and ends with a tear." - Anonymous

Well, I like the plot.  Everything else was a bit "eh." You tended to repeat yourself qutie a bit and the flow didn't quite fit after the description. Is this the prologue to a book or something? That would explain some of it.  <><

on Aug. 6 2011 at 2:37 pm
traveler03 GOLD, San Juan, Texas
14 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Living is nothing. Dreaming is something.

Very cute. I like the characters.

on May. 9 2011 at 2:57 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

I cant get on here much but i have my facebook and tumblr accounts that i write everyday mostly tumblr just ask for my url :]

on Apr. 18 2011 at 10:57 pm
poojakistan96, King Of Prussia, Pennsylvania
0 articles 2 photos 7 comments
love this a lot...KEEP WRITING PLEASE..I WANT TO KNOW MORE :)

on Mar. 27 2011 at 2:46 pm
musicprincess PLATINUM, Braselton, Georgia
23 articles 0 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say that love is forever, your forever is all that I need

This is fabulous! I'm dying to know more.


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