Sudden Movements

September 22, 2009
By Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
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1:13
The liquor burns and scratches its way down my throat, but the watery feeling in my head makes up for the unpleasantness.
You see, it's easier to make stupid, poorly thought-out decisions when you're drunk, because you know when someone asks you the next day "wtf @ last nite?!" you can simply reply with "I was drunk".

Any other explanation has too many words to text.
He closed the door behind him, asking me where my roommate was.
"She's at her boyfriend's" I reply monotonously,"...for the night."
He small talks at me for a bit, until I get bored. I switch on some music, singing along and picking up the cups and trash from the night before.
"God, it's been so long since I've seen you!".
Genius.
I pick up a half-empty bottle of pineapple soda and fill it to the top with vodka.
I take a long swig.
God, what is this, a seven dollar handle?
I take a sip from his drink, which is even stronger than mine.

1:47
He lays down, leaving a space for me next to him.
I methodically turn the TV to louder music, turn off the light, and get comortable next to him.
He wraps his arms around my shoulders, pulling me in closer to him.
I let him.
He pulls his shirt off with one hand, and kisses me right when I am about to say something.
He's a lifeless kisser
I bite at his lower lip and trace my fingers around his jaw just to make things interesting.
He shivers slowly.

A lot of my bedmoves are really intimate, so sometimes it feels a little weird with the one who I barely knew, or the ones who I'd known some time ago.

2:20
Running my hands up and down his chest, I wrap my legs around his and pull myself on top of him.
He appreciates where this is going.
He asks 'the question'; wordlessly I get up from the bed, exit the room, and walk to the other side of the dorm where we have a community box of them for these exact scenarios.
Before returning to bed, I slip off my Lady Hanes.
Boxer briefs are meant for women, in my opinion. They're so much more fun.

3:27
He falls asleep after, and I go to the bathroom to fix myself up before heading downstairs for a cigarette.
A few members of the usual crowd are down there, and I might as we'll've handed them a play-by-play of my night, because that is usually what a 3 a.m. cigarette means.
The one girl asks a couple questions, but the two guys don't.
They've been the one who's asleep upstairs before.

4:06
Once the cold is too much for me to stand I head back inside.
The taller guy follows me in.
He grabs me by the arm, gently, as I'm about to ascend the stairs.
"Hey, I had fun the other night"
"And?" I sort of make it a statement rather than an inquiry
"Annnnnd I think we should try it again sometime."

I smirk at him and pull him closer by the front of his jeans.
"Yeah...?" I whisper, as I lean upwards and in as if I was about to kiss him.
He swallows and nods briefly.

I turn and begin to hike up the stairs, "I'll see if I can work you in."
I deliver that line with a turn of the head, smile, wink, hair flip.
God, I miss my mom.


The author's comments:
eh.
It's okay.

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DaisyC. said...
on Apr. 29 2010 at 5:40 pm
DaisyC., North Bennington, Vermont
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I love this one, espeacialy the last line! Could you read my article 'Miscellaneous Abominations'? :)

on Apr. 8 2010 at 7:27 pm
Wellington BRONZE, Ann Arbor, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
A man is not finished when he is defeated. He is finished when he quits.
Richard M. Nixon

love the writing style.

take a look at a bit of mine?? it is 'pending approval' so its in a forum and it is rough right now but ill take any advice..i love your work. thanks!

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on Apr. 8 2010 at 7:25 pm
Wellington BRONZE, Ann Arbor, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
A man is not finished when he is defeated. He is finished when he quits.
Richard M. Nixon

its so different..i love the writing style and the way you write your 1st person...if you have time, could you maybe take a look at this: (its a link to my short story(just the first bit) on a forum as it is 'pending approval'..its pretty rough but ill take any advice. thanks!

TeenInk.com/forums?act=post&topic_id=17&thread_id=30430


rawr5 said...
on Jan. 11 2010 at 7:04 pm
i reallllllyy like this.it's differant than what most people will post,keep writing,i can't wait to read more :)

on Dec. 20 2009 at 9:51 am
DiscardedHarmony DIAMOND, Woodinville, Washington
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This was one of my favorite pieces of yours. The way you put the time in made it all more coherent; it fit together so much better with the times. Even though the MC seems seductive and flirty, I love how everything had an edge of apprehension to it, like this wasn't really what she wanted. And the last line is perfect.

on Nov. 29 2009 at 2:43 am
toxic.monkey SILVER, Tashkent, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Homo homini lupus"

i'll say ur insane, but only in the good sense

i mean, the way u write is different and i love it :P

on Nov. 2 2009 at 3:54 pm
Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
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Um...okay.? haha

In response to there being ANY sort of pedophilia in this, no. He was the same age as me, and yes this is non-fiction. Pretty much everything I do is either non-fiction, or based off of real events. Remember, the narrator steps outside and sees other guys who have "been the one asleep upstairs" before, so it couldn't be that. Thanks for the interesting feedback!

. said...
on Nov. 2 2009 at 12:41 pm
Wait! wait, I got this one. Okay...wait for it. Bam, there it is. (What you can't see it? grrr) Okay. I have to be your friend. I know some random girl online who says that must be a petafile, but I'm in a no jones business. Really, if you could give me half...okay, a third, hey, i'm not greedy, an eighth of your insight, I'd be the happiest person for the next five seconds.

(All who did not understand what I just wrote say aye....Okay, the ayes have it. Nevermind...)

TigerLynn GOLD said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 8:27 pm
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."
--Byron

With each piece of yours that i read my amazement and wonder at your killer talent quadruples! PLEASE WRITE MORE AND MORE AND MORE YOU ARE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GRRRRRRREEEEEAT!

a.(L) SILVER said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 6:43 pm
a.(L) SILVER,
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Favorite Quote:
. . . So take too many pictures, laugh too much and love like you've never been hurt, because every 60 seconds you spend upset, is a minute of happiness you will never get back. ( L )


xoxo, a.(L)

wow.. your such an amazing writer :) . I can only hope to one day be able to write something like this. Really enjoyed it, and i loved the end.

on Sep. 27 2009 at 4:06 pm
Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
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Thanks, I really appreciate it! :)

Callisto said...
on Sep. 27 2009 at 7:50 am
Callisto, Worcester, Other
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This is really stunning. Perfectly captured atmosphere and a killer last line.


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