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It’s been 17 years and all I’ve done is wait, wait for you here in the darkness. Do you even remember me? Have you even thought of me since then? When…WHEN…will you come back? I don’t think I can wait any longer. All I want is to lash out, but I can’t, because you have the key, the one key that can unlock me and save me from this endless darkness.



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Lacer said...
May 9, 2012 at 10:40 pm:

It's obviously metaphorical, but the problem is that it's too short :/

I think that if you wanted to, you could turn this into an actual short story, and maintain its metaphor. Other than that, it's cheesy, but in a delightful way!

 
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birds_and_bees said...
May 9, 2012 at 10:19 pm:
the artical is very misterious and i litterly frowned that i could scroll down and read more!
 
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mammothfrk said...
May 9, 2012 at 5:02 pm:
Its good, kept me curious. 
 
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contemplatorThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 8, 2012 at 11:02 pm:
It made me curious. That means its good.
 
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Lexie_Lynn1995@yahoo.com said...
May 8, 2012 at 11:24 am:
This is pretty good:)
 
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Gothica295This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 7, 2012 at 8:13 pm:

This is wonderfully written. It has me wondering what exactly happened in the situation.

If you have any more work relating to this, I'd love to read it!

 
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Breanna D. said...
May 6, 2012 at 5:46 pm:
Wow this is beautifully written. Really relatable. =) 
 
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Jlove said...
May 6, 2012 at 10:49 am:
I really like this you should check out mine called " Dear Darkness" you'd love it :) so check it out
 
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izzy. said...
May 2, 2012 at 10:32 pm:
wow really discriptive and a captivting idea of lose and love and rememberince; i think most people can relate well to this; short and sweat phrase.
 
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chloasaurusrexXD said...
May 2, 2012 at 6:12 pm:
wow. I can totally relate to this. It's really good.
 
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Silver-winged said...
May 2, 2012 at 7:46 am:

I LOVE the part where you said,

"... you have the key, the one key that can unlock me and save me from this endless darkness"

:)

 
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C.K.Snow said...
Apr. 22, 2012 at 10:08 am:

This is great! I can really relate to this! Good job!

Could you check out my work? Thanks!

 
Kylah replied...
Apr. 22, 2012 at 11:44 am :
thanks so much!
 
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curlygurlray said...
Apr. 21, 2012 at 11:36 pm:
i think is its great because everyone has that one person in life where this fits their description to us
 
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somerandomperson said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 10:25 pm:
I love this becauseit easy to relate to
 
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bearsfan654 said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 10:12 am:
Can you give feedback on "A Race Through Space?"
 
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bearsfan654 said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 10:11 am:
Great job! I loved the imagery and the message of this fictional work. 
 
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Atl.Braves03This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 8:48 pm:
Hey, this is great. Writing is a great way to express some of the emotions that you would normally try to hide isn't it? Keep it up! :)
 
Kylah replied...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 5:40 pm :
I totally agree!
 
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DanielM. said...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 6:04 pm:
Wow that was really good. I really like the title it really caught my eye. Great Job and keep on writing!
 
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