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He steps into the classroom with his head down, almost ashamed to be here. He walks quickly to the back to an old chemical-stained desk, but his effort doesn’t work. The jocks notice him and begin to pull puns. His head lowers with each throbbing word.

He is the smartest guy in the school and is often used as a model student in class. Each time he is mentioned, classmates turn and stare while his head lowers to its limit. He barely looks up, only to take notes from the chalk-caked board.

He looks at me and I smile. He turns his head, lowering it again, and begins to write. I wonder if it hurts him more than it hurts me. People smile and act kind, but they make fun of him. People smile at me, but I shrug it off.

I’m an outcast among the girls. I’m not a shopper or a rich girl who flaunts dim-witted talent. I sit by myself, and I’m the subject of gossip and cruelty, but I’m not as smart as him. I can’t say that I feel sorry for him for being mocked because he’s the smartest guy around. I feel sorry for the others who don’t notice his traits. He is smarter than everyone here, and he is kinder. I think his best trait is his hidden blue eyes.

His deep blue eyes are darker than the sea, and Poseidon could never possess them. No other person in the school has eyes like his. They’re always covered by his thick black hair which drifts down to his neck. I notice them every day and they haven’t ceased to enthrall me.

Class ends and he quickly leaves, his normal routine to avoid confrontation. I smile at him every day; I wonder if he notices.

Another day, another class, and with it come more words. He steps into the room with his head high. He walks slowly to the back and sits next to me. Everyone glares at his unusual behavior and takes off in conversation and gossip. I can’t help but smile as he stares at me during class.

Class ends, and gossip stirs. He stands as I stand, and I look at him with a smile. He smiles in return, which makes his eyes gleam. He leans over and whispers, “You have gorgeous green eyes.”

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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Ashley Rogers said...
Oct. 24, 2008 at 1:55 pm:
I loved it sooooo much! It was so descriptive! Keep at it, and you'll be famous in no time!
 
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Allice* said...
Oct. 22, 2008 at 8:02 pm:
I really like this, especially the ending. It's a bit unexpected at the ending, so when I read it I totally smiled. I love the way it's all kind of sad at the beginning, but you then flip it around. Keep it up!
 
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random girl said...
Oct. 20, 2008 at 11:46 pm:
Amazing
 
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SN said...
Oct. 17, 2008 at 1:39 am:
I wish you had written more! But I loved the shortness...I just want to know what happened between them!
 
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nunitaxo said...
Oct. 1, 2008 at 12:16 am:
very nicee :)
 
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love2write@ Nytime! said...
Sept. 19, 2008 at 11:42 pm:
I really love your writing style! I'm a new writer and I do love romantic stories.Especially those that makes you think.After reading Hidden Blue I REALLY wanted more! ****Keep writing****
 
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harry_potter_fangirl said...
Sept. 17, 2008 at 1:35 am:
wow. that was amazing. you have such a talent. please write more!
 
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blueeyes15 said...
Sept. 5, 2008 at 4:37 pm:
i love this story thats so cute<3
 
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stupidaccrebessa said...
Sept. 3, 2008 at 9:29 pm:
That was super hot.
 
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Rachh. said...
Aug. 31, 2008 at 7:21 pm:
One word, wow.
 
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danni:) said...
Sept. 6, 2008 at 9:32 am:
wow! so cutee!!!!!! passionate and beautiful!
 
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sanity_laughter said...
Aug. 24, 2008 at 12:38 am:
You have an excellent writing technique that puts the reader directly in the room with your characters. This is an amazing piece and extremely easy to relate to. I AM the girl when I read this. I KNOW the guy and I FEEL the emotions. (Don't tone down a thing. I love comparisons between eyes and the sea.)
 
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naknaktarnak said...
Aug. 22, 2008 at 6:57 am:
Great ending! It was such a cute story I loved it!
 
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stargal77 said...
Aug. 20, 2008 at 12:40 am:
a wondorus novel, well for a short story! This has to be the coolest and most romantic short story I have ever read, 2 thumbs up! (if I have more than 2 thumbs i would give ya 4)
 
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shrewlalia said...
Aug. 17, 2008 at 12:32 pm:
Awesome! I especially liked the ending
 
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noriwolf said...
Aug. 13, 2008 at 12:05 am:
That was really really cute! The one part that bothered me a little was the "darker than the sea" stuff... You don't have to make it sound like a romance novel to make it sound passionate, so if you just tone it down a little it will be amazing. Good job!
 
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